Here is another capable writer. What I noticed immediately was that his illustrations are doing a lot of the story telling. Lots of picture details and color, even close up views. I can't wait to show him some examples of other authors who have used various viewpoints with their illustrations. He will be so proud! I also love how his enthusiasm comes through in the story. He has a start on using his voice here, something he will be able to share with all his peers as a great way to add detail to their stories!