I love your writiing. I can see the movie in my mind. Great lines, "a reminder, a memory, a mistake". My list might also include: a better way to say the same thing. You've modeled a great way to describe something so simple in action, but more difficult in practice.
I love "smudge stained prints" and "brush away the wrong." I also love the list at the end, though it makes me a little sad that the last line is mistake.
Love it! I love how the sensory details lead me to what's actually happening "the smell of wood chips and rubber blow off the page"... nice!
ReplyDeleteI love ambling through the words in your poem. Very descriptive.
ReplyDeleteI love your writiing. I can see the movie in my mind. Great lines, "a reminder, a memory, a mistake". My list might also include: a better way to say the same thing. You've modeled a great way to describe something so simple in action, but more difficult in practice.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is really neat! I read it a couple of times to really understand... great for visualizing!
ReplyDeleteI love "smudge stained prints" and "brush away the wrong." I also love the list at the end, though it makes me a little sad that the last line is mistake.
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